This is the result of a fun exercise I did recently. I took all the first lines from every chapter to see how it would read. Writers are weird, I know!
(will probably do this for the other Lore books also)
Prologue
In a time now passed beyond memory, a man whispered
over a golden disc as he set it into a vice.
Part I -
Darkness
Rayne rested on the final descent from the
high pass, sipping tepid water.
Aven was a self-proclaimed
sorcerer.
Samson of the Mye dropped a hoe onto his foot, but
that ache was as nothing compared to the one in his head.
With the Medaillon around
her neck, Averroes retreated.
He stood on a brown square two by two feet and next to
it a green square, then another brown, another green and so on … he was on a
giant checkerboard!
Light filtered into the
clearing in dancing sunspots.
It was hot and Taranis shifted in bed for a cooler
region.
The Sagorin of Glorium lived
and died in much the way as other mortals.
Margus paced his chamber, his haven of light in the
darkness of the world.
Margus mulled over the news
his spies returned with.
A stiff breeze swept the lake, raising white tufted
wavelets.
Three thousand years before
the present time the human population of Valaris was essentially decimated.
Using magic to travel via doorways through the spaces,
insubstantial as a breath of wind, faster than light, they materialized in the
clearing.
The five Guardians used the
period of waiting to rest, acclimatise and renew in natural light.
He had her measure now.
Valaris’s period of darkness
lasted twelve nights and the appearance of the new moon was reason for
celebration throughout the land, therefore the capital letter title ‘New Moon’.
Dawn broke through the veil of night when Taranis
mentioned it.
Fourteen diverse tasks; they
had the essence of the game.
North of the clearing a track led through the trees to
a picturesque setting where one of many streams lacing the Forest floor widened
into a deep, green pool.
What lay beyond the Forest
came as a shock to the northerners.
They started out early, hoping to make good progress
before the heat of the day.
Captain Bertin was the
complete opposite of his mother.
The horizon vanished in an enormous mass of dirty
thunderheads, pressing down on the surface of the heaving ocean, rushing
insanely closer.
Resourceful McSee was a
hero.
The land was inhospitable; huge, windswept boulders,
barren sand, stunted trees, grey and dun.
Margus left his citadel and
world and transferred to the uninhabited moon orbiting the small planet the
Valleur called Ardosia.
They left the turbulent ocean behind to enter the
Gatherers’ Circle.
Situated on the western
coast of Tor Island, Actar experienced the excessive heat of the summer season.
Actar, during the day, recovered from its nightly
excesses.
They dispersed after the
morning’s revelations, needing time away from discussion, debate and
information, from knowledge.
Part
II - Arcana
In the beginning, if there is a beginning, Mother Universe was empty
and lonely; thus, children were born for her enjoyment, and her grief.
Two thousand
years after the remaining Valleur settled on Valaris, a scant three years after
the completion of Mantra’s palace, Vannis awakened from deep sleep in the dead
of night.
Five hundred years later, Vannis
approached his seven thousandth Naming Day.
The space warp was
ensorcelled into Valaris’s atmosphere after Mantra, last to go, dematerialised.
From the main balcony, Vannis saw the hundreds of
fires of the human encampment.
Part III - Rayne
Averroes huddled for warmth and comfort
before her small fire.
Aven was full of
questions, which Averroes answered simply.
A distinctive alteration to the horizon.
“I’ll not be joining you,” Aven
announced. “I’ve decided to remain here.”
Varelie screamed and bolted from her warm bed into her
father’s lap.
It gave him pleasure after
all, taking on the Golden.
They waited for Vannis.
Vannis stared down at Dante.
When Vannis found the Centuar in a meadow a fair
distance from the Palace, Belun was all he found there.
Vannis requested a space to
find equanimity in before they rejoined the team and thus Rayne accessed an
image in his mind of a clearing much like the one the team waited in.
Margus turned away.
Epilogue
Valleur possess added
biology that allows them to breathe air alien to humankind, a fortunate
situation given where the scatterlings of Ardosia were forced to ground.
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